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Wil Dalton's avatar

If you’re curious, here’s Walt’s favorite poem that he alludes to in the second section:

“Since all the riches of this world

May be gifts from the Devil and earthly kings,

I should suspect that I worshipp’d the Devil

If I thank’d my God for worldly things.”

-William Blake

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Amran Gowani's avatar

What became of Maeve? Do you know? Ominous interaction between the two of you.

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Wil Dalton's avatar

The last Walt saw Maeve was in high school, where she seemed happy, had a better (and more muscular) boyfriend, but also good grades and kindness and a future of promising possibility.

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Amran Gowani's avatar

That's good to hear.

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Karie Anne's avatar

The prayer thing had me thinking today......wow!

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Wil Dalton's avatar

You’re welcome?

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Karie Anne's avatar

I think?

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Meg Oolders's avatar

That was a rollercoaster, Wil.

I smiled about things: "I tried not to stare, which was challenging because I had lost my sunglasses in the water earlier in the day." Been there.

I remembered things: Like I used to be into reading my horoscope when I was younger, and I learned that all astrological signs have specific erogenous zones. Mine was my knees, which was...um...interesting. The guy I was into was a Scorpio - so... his "zone" was his dick. 😂 That just seemed obvious. And terrifying. I just wanted him to squeeze my knee!

This story also reminded me, sadly, how much lying kids do to each other. And how much they lie because they're afraid to be who they are. The scene with Maeve made my heart hurt. For her and for Walt. I wanted a better moment for both of them.

And did you mean to call Jeff Jack? 😂 I thought maybe it was a joke. Am I in on it? Or was it just a typo. I have a friend who routinely misnames my husband Jack as Jake or Jeff to be funny. The joke's going on year 10 at this point.

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Wil Dalton's avatar

Thanks Meg! That’s the goal, to elicit your own past through telling Walt’s history. Oops about Jeff/Jack! In early version, friend was named Jack and skinamax a minor mention, but in rewrite I expanded the explicitness of the late night movies description and decided “Jack” should be a “Jeff”... because if I was your husband’s friend, I would be asking you how often you helped your husband off a horse every time I visited.

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Wil Dalton's avatar

I’ve fixed it, all Jeffs now.

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Meg Oolders's avatar

I help Jack off all the horses, Wil.

Joke landed. You're welcome.

It helps that his last name starts with an O.

Also, his full name is John-Jacob.

Are you singing the song yet?

How about now?

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Wil Dalton's avatar

Lolololololol

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